Tuesday, 13 July 2010

The One that Got Away

Kind bloggie friends please bear with me!

This is one of my pieces I sent off for a competition and of course didn't win!! But I liked it so much I thought I'd share this with you. The prize was a book on how to write short stories and you had to write - creatively - why you wanted this book.



How do I write a story
That’s short and full of glory?
It must engage the reader
So they may perhaps consider
How life in all its complexities
May be distilled in such narratives
Without them realising
The difficulties of composing
These perfect little vignettes
I need all the help I can get.

Thank you.


Charlie says: While you were typing up that sad excuse for a poem, I beheaded Mr MacDoonagoogle.

Have a tutti-frutti Tuesday everyone!


Kea said...

Well, you didn't win because they could see you didn't need any help. :-)

Way to go, Charlie! LOL. Smooches to the wonderful furry boy.

Happy Tuesday!

Michelle Scott said...

I think that's a great poem! I think it deserves another chance. You will be submitting it again, won't you?

Beth Zimmerman said...

Charlie is much too hard on you, Jenn! That was lovely!

m.q said...

happi tuesday charlie!!!

Katnip Lounge said...

Oooh! Class & chaos in one post.


The Creek Cats said...

You have very pawsome writing abilities! We think that was a great poem!!

Charlie, way to go beheading Mr MacDoonagoogle.

Awwwww.....Tutti Frutti... this makes mom kinda sad cause that was the name of one of the foster kittens that left over the weekend. She really loved that sweet girl.

Theresa Milstein said...

I think yours is good. Did they post the winning entry? I'm sorry you didn't win, but I bet you don't need the book to write a short story full of glory!

I remember your post on shoes, which had a poem I loved.

Charlie, what did you do to poor Mr. MacDoonagoogle?

Sharon K. Mayhew said...

I think it was lovely, Jennifer. The judges must have been nutty!

Brian said...

Well I liked it, even Mr. MacDoonagoogle lost his head over it! Howdy Charlie!

elizabeth mueller said...

Hi Jennifer! I thought that poem was cute! Simple and straight from the heart. I really enjoyed it! Thanks for sharing! <3

Deborah said...

AWWW Poor Mr. MacDoonagoogle....I didn't think your poem was that bad! :)

Susan Fields said...

Hi Old Kitty! I was so happy to see your comment on my blog today - I really missed you and your wonderful comments and posts and Charlie pictures while I was away!

I love your poem - it's definitely a winner in my book!

Jacqueline said...

Too bad you didn't win, Jenn, I liked it and thought it was a great entry!...You are a talented writer, hang in there!...Sorry handsome Charlie beheaded his favorite toy!...xoxo...J, Calle, Halle, Sukki

Jayne said...

I think they thought you were too accomplished to win - I like your poem! And poor Mr MacDoonagoogle... could have been worse, could have been Mr Mouse!

m.q said...

i had post a letter for u yesterday
hopefully u can inform me if u had receive it.TQ

India Drummond said...

I say Mr MacDonagoogle had it coming.

Great work on the poem!

Marg said...

Well we sure don't know why you didn't win. That was an excellent poem even though Charlie didn't like it.
Charlie why did you take off your best friend's head. Poor Mr.Macdoonagoogle. Maybe the hoooman can get him another head.
Like the poem

Hannah and Lucy said...

We liked your poem but perhaps the judges had had a bad day and just pulled an entry out of a hat. Charlie - you'll have to be more gentle with your toys - can your mum sew Mr MacDoonagoogle's head back on for you.

penandpaints said...

Love the poem, you're a great writer, I can tell by your blog posts :)
What had Mr Macdoonagoogle done to deserve such severe punishment I wonder?

Simon Kewin said...

I think that's rather good! Seems to me you have a talent for comic verse ...

Sammy and Andy said...

Hi, Charlie!!!!!!! Good be-heading job!!!!!!

And good job, mom....we liked your piece. xxxxxxxxxx

Rahma Krambo said...

I found your blog while over at Shannon Messenger's place. I couldn't resist taking a peek at someone who calls themselves Old Kitty. I'm a bit of a cat freak myself and even wrote a book seen through the eyes of some remarkable cat characters.

Looking forward to reading more of your posts. I see you are a poet!

Ellie said...

Poor Mr MacDoonagoogle :(

Don't give up on the poem, it's really good and should be submitted elsewhere!

Hart Johnson said...

I liked your little story! I think the uncontrollable in those things is, even if YOURS is great, you have no control whatsoever of the competition...

*giggles at Charlie beheading his toy*

ABBY said...

We all thought that poem was terrific.
No sense trying to explain someone else lack of seeing greatness!

We know if you keep at it you will reach your destination and goal.

Abby says:
Hi Charlie!

Jackee said...

That was so cute, I laughed out loud! :o) Thanks for sharing.

I say save it for another similar contest, it's worth another chance.

Talli Roland said...

I love this poem, Old Kitty! How clever and witty!

(Did you notice my rhyme there? hehe!)

Poor Mr McThingy. I'm not even going to try to spell out his name. He's dead, anyway!

notesfromnadir said...

Cute poem.

Charlie sure manages to keep busy!

Amy and The House of Cats said...

Ok, see I think it is a great poem. Maybe that means I need help with writing, since it didn't win. I don't know why it wouldn't have won.

And Charlie I hope that you are able to un-behead mr. macdoonagoogle so you can play with him some more and behead him again!

hampshireflyer said...

Oh this made me laugh, thank you..... and how many times has he dismantled that thing now?! :)