Wednesday 3 November 2010

Eye of the Logline

Bloggie friends!!! I have my tagline, my logline, my thingy-line!! LOL!

Apologies for ambushing you with my novel's logline but it’s taken me squazzilion re-writes to get this far!

Now does this grab you?? Yay or nay bloggie friends? Thumbs up or down? Deal or no deal??

Don’t be shy!!! LOL!
When 11 year old Ryan’s life is threatened by bullies he is rescued by his imaginary friend whom he soon realises is a vengeful spirit with her own terrifying agenda for him and his family.
Charlie says: I do not like what I’m staring at…




Tune in tomorrow bloggie friends to discover what’s perturbed poor Charlie!

Have a wickedly delicious Wednesday!

42 comments:

Anonymous said...

Now, I want to read your novel. Haha :)

Tune in tomorrow I will. You know I will!

Guinevere said...

That sounds really intriguing - a great log line! I'd read it.

Can't wait to find out what is perturbing poor Charlie! :)

Brian's Home Blog said...

I really like your tagline...and your hook too! But I'm not sure what it is Charlie doesn't like!

Luna said...

I'm intrigued! Charlie is such a cutie...:)

Great space!

Luna said...

I'm definitely intrigued! Charlie is such a cutie...:)

Great space!

Theresa Milstein said...

What a unique premise. An imaginary friend with a terrifying agenda is intriguing. I want to read it too.

Charlie is upset because your manuscript isn't displayed. Don't blame him since I want to read it too.

Anonymous said...

I want more.....

iasa said...

My eleven year old says 'i wanna read it'

The thirteen year old says 'Well how does he stop her?!?'

I would pick it up and read it.

Pork Chop says 'iz watchin Charlie starin at sometin

Katnip Lounge said...

HOOKED! More!!

m.q said...

i will tune in tomorrow
or the day after tomorrow..or...
p/s: i will stick to ur blog..hihihi

The Chair Speaks said...

Looking forward to read more. :)

umi_e said...

I want to read it too ;)

* have a nice day *

Summer Frey said...

Yes, that sounds great! Really caught me towards the end. :)

Jacqueline said...

Great job, Jenn...I'm with Reenie=I really like the tagline and want to read the whole story now...We'll be back to check up on Charlie tomorrow...xoxo...J, Calle, Halle, Sukki

lupie said...

We say "yay"!
Lucky : Mom! Someone grabbed my butt! hehehe

Ohh... Charlie, what's not right?? Come tell us!!
Surely here tomorrow to find out!

Have a great Wednesday my lovely friends!

Mr Puddy said...

Don't worry Charlie !
I have my secretary with me here ( my mom ) , she already takes a note so it's her job to remind me tomorrow.

fairyhedgehog said...

Woohoo! That's some dilemma your character is in! I like it.

And Charlie is wonderful as always.

The Monkeys said...

That is a fabulous tagline!

Charlie, we don't know what's bothering you, but we hope it's nothing serious!

Al said...

I think it's great.

I have to know what is tormenting poor Charlie.

Susan Fields said...

Ooh - a vengeful spirit - sounds good!

Kea said...

It does sound intriguing! But I thought publishers wrote those for authors. Of course, I know nothing about it, was just making an assumption.

We're all on tenterhooks to see what it is that has Charlie so perturbed!

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

A little tweaking and it'll be an amazing grabber.
Poor Charlie. Maybe he'll be happier posing alongside a certain book when it arrives...?

Sharon K. Mayhew said...

Really good Jennifer...my only suggestion would be to change "he is" to he's. It makes it sound more like an 11 year old's voice...

???I thought you wrote for grown ups???

Hannah and Lucy said...

Loved your log line - it draws you in to find out what happens.
Charlie what is upsetting you?
Luv Hannah and Lucy xx xx

Ann said...

Intriguing! Looking forward to hearing more.

Poor Charlie.....is he haunted by the imaginary friend!

Creepy Query Girl said...

Ooooh! I like it!

Hart Johnson said...

Oooh! I love the idea of a vengeful spirit masquerading as an imaginary friend! Definitely want more... though I might up the tension prior to needing the rescue... how long have the bullies been tormenting. I'd love to draw out the dichotomy of this spirit... REALLY NEEDED first, THEN blast the agenda...

Bossy Betty said...

Oooooo. You've got me hooked!

Hugs to Charlie!

klahanie said...

Hi Charlie,
Penny, the Jack Russell dog, here. 'Arf, arf' (wags tail).
I am going to have Gary let me sit on his lap so I can 'read' what so perturbed you.
Bye for now.
Love from Penny :-)

The Nemesis List said...

Is it a remote controlled mouse upsetting Charlie?

Nice lines Jen, as always. Charlie's a very good mascot, all the people he lives with get published!

Roxy said...

Very interesting premise, Kitty. I want to know more! Charlie is adorable even when bothered.

notesfromnadir said...

Your logline makes me want to read your book!

Charlie looks disdainful. Hope to hear why soon!

Cheer up, Charlie! :)

Talli Roland said...

Wow! That sounds sound interesting - I love the twist that the person he thought would help him might not!

Happy Wednesday, Old Kitty and Charlie.

Lydia Kang said...

Thumbs up.
I love how the spirit has their own agenda. Love that!

Kat_RN said...

I want to read the story. I think Charlie wants to type his story too.
He is so cute!
Kat

Pat @ Mille Fiori Favoriti said...

Very suspenseful tagline, Jenn. I like it!

Is Charlie perturbed because he is not yet allowed outside?

Marg said...

That is a good tagline, logline, what ever, beginning. Sounds pretty interesting.I like those kind of books.
So Charlie what are you looking at.Can't wait to find out tomorrow. Take care and have a good evening or day,what ever it is.

laughingwolf said...

ok... but should that not be 'who', not 'whom'?

kenny sez: hiya charlie :)

Carolyn Abiad said...

Charlie's admiring that nice logline! Good work!

Patricia Stoltey said...

Thanks for dropping by my blog for Stephen Tremp's guest spot. I hope to see more of you.

I think your logline is excellent, and the chocolate eye photos are priceless. I've been reading as many YA and middle grade novels lately as I'm reading adult novels. The writing for YA books is so good these days.

Jackee said...

Intriguing!!! I really love the vengeful spirit twist. :o) Can't wait to hear more.

Jans Funny Farm said...

Oh, we taught Jan something new today. We confused her with the use of "logline." She didn't know what it was. Well, we didn't either but we googled it before we sprang it on her. hehe.

Yours is pretty neat.